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My first thought--on the side of curiosity is -- why is it titled 'Musings of a Statue' when it does seem that the girl isn't a statue and is musing? ...

It is a bit long for easy critiquing--as a short story. ^_^ But not inadmissably incredible. I only have the time for a skimmed sort of critique; but I'll hit ...

Fun story, Sam! The character's voice was very easy, genuine without being trite or unnecassarily simple. ^_^ I don’t like blood, and never have, so I went upstairs and didn’t ...

First chapter--first piece . Well, more than to return the favour, I was curious to read something you'd written, Tri--other than the brief Fools' Duel entry a few months ago. ...

The first sentence or two immediatly drew me in. You've got a knack for a bleak brevity--it says what it means and leaves room for you to consider its implications. ...

I read this...last week and meant to say what came to mind. Naturally, my time skipped out on me. Your first person narrative, Incan, is almost painfully engaging. It's intense--and ...

The end does sum-up, I think--and makes what comes before un-puzzled in retrospect. I love your images, CL. And I'm not much of a poetry critiquer, one way or the ...

Some thick myth-telling there--and it looks like it's got a definite side to it worth reading. But without space it's more than difficult to puzzle through on a computer screen. ...

I'm more adept in prose than poetry. But haikus always a good puzzle, a challenge to write something in so little. It tends to be better at impressions, images than ...

Hey Incan. The detail and depth of the character's voice is immediately involving. Though first-person, and even sometimes vaguely conversational, the images and description never get bogged down in s

Before anyone can read it, you may want to put spaces in for paragraphs . Every new paragraph, double space. ^_^ Otherwise, it will undoubtably be unreadable. And not an ...

It moves break-neck and doesn't quite establish (as Rosethorn notes) an age or surroundings for Damian. Spaces between paragraphs will make it easier to read, and slow down a bit. ...

It was very amusing, and the authorial interjections--far from standing out as inept, fit well with the tongue-in-cheek tone. ^_^ For a spin-off (and off-the-cuff write, I assume) it worked ...

Hullo Darksleuth. Spacing--though not a difficulty in printed books--makes rather more difference on the forums. It's almost impossible to read all that text bunched together. Space it out, double? It

Dialogue was too much fun. ^_^ Too much would be in a good sense of that... "Pistol Grip" immediately brought to mind a certain kind of hilt in fencing--got my ...